Review ot Signiticant Literature, Drawing of Varied Sources There is a variety of material cited, some excellent references located. Just make sure you don t have too many MDPI references. A few

2. Review ot Signiticant
Literature, Drawing of Varied
Sources
There is a variety of material
cited, some excellent references
located. Just make sure you don t
have too many MDPI references.
A few is fine.
3. Structure and Framing of
Argument
This one definitely needs some
work. Just think about how you
want the narrative to flow overall
rather than having so many short
subsections. It then almost feels
like repetition or confusing when
you return to topics in greater
depth later.
4.Writing Style
I tend to be stingy with the
subheaders, but I think you would
benefit from cutting a lot of
yours. If it’s one or two short
paragraphs per section, it feels
more superficial. Additionally,
some of the writing, especially
opening lines, are a little clunky.
5. Formatting and Referencing
Over all very good. Watch out for
et al.s in the bibliography.